I made tea

We have been learning to add detail to our writing so that the readers get a clear picture in their head and can imagine being there. We used an excellent website which shows it so well. Have a look at it here (I Made Tea). We have been trying a few sentences and it has been great seeing some of the detail students have added. This is one from Nicholas.

I made tea sentence:  The sun came up
Sentence with detail:  The morning mist hung low to the silent valley. Everything was a stone cold colour, robbed of its light by the night. Glowing shafts of gold could be seen piercing their way through the mist. Then as if someone had struck a match in the sky a golden fiery ball started to burn its way through the vale of mist.